[Toraerie] Re: Words of Wisdom and Poetry

[Mary Jane Thillen]

Thoughts for the wisdom page overall:

I think we should call it the wisdom page. It is full of wisdom, or wise phrases, but not wisdoms.

Also, we don't need the big title at the top - it's really self-explanatory.

1. Trumps.  No h.
3. I think that "is" rather than "equals" is better here.  If you were to read it, inputting "equals" for the mathematical symbol, it sounds wrong.
8. The "how to find your form" information would probably do better at the bottom of the page with an anchor-link on "form" rather than interrupting the flow.

MOAS:

1. There should be a comma after key.
3: There's an extra 3.  Much like the link to the form, I think the anecdote would do well anchored to "No, Really." and at the bottom of the page.


And, some additions:

Officers - 
     1. Keep a deputy, or groom a Successor from the newer members.  When
you step down, having someone who knows how to do the job right is priceless.
     2. Remember to keep your membership up to date - you can't be an officer without being a member.
Webminister - 
     5. Readability is always more important than beauty.
Minister of Arts & Sciences - 
     4. Have a backup plan for something to do if a teacher doesn't show up or cancels - this can be as simple as discussing event ideas or as complicated as teaching a class on some art/science/reasearch you've done.
Autocrat - 
     1. Delegate, Delegate, Delegate.
     2. Choose your staff early, and make sure they have enough time and energy (even with school) to do the job.  Sometimes willingness isn't enough.
Seneschal - 
     1. Always know what is going on with your officers; what classes they have, estimated vacations & graduation dates, how long they plan to keep the office, if they have their forms filled out, etc.
     
For Lady Eyja specifically, some poetry points (If I didn't poke at one, it's because I think it's perfect as-is.):

1. N'er, I believe it is spelled.  Used for Never, and never doesn't have an e on the end. (Of course, maybe it does in norse poetry?)

2. Maybe "is like a word worm" for the end? Wood rot sounds too short.  Maybe "rotten/ed wood"?

3. It feels odd for the first segment to end in "or".  Either version is ok for me, the new one is less violent.  Did you intend the second r on "stirr" in the last line?

And overall, Eyja-doll? Well done.

I was wondering if we were planning on keeping the non-poetry versions?  Maybe put them next to the poetry? You know, for those of us who just aren't quick enough. (I had to look at the list to see what you were aiming at for a few. >.<)

In service,
Lady Ciara inghean MaelPatraic





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